I wish we had left off on
better terms.
It still pains me to see you
around everywhere.
I'm stronger then letting it get
to me.
Just wish we were on
speaking terms.
Maybe then it wouldn't
hurt so.
Ending our friendship was like a knife
killing life.
If your wondering why I'm bringing
this up.
It's because it has always been on
my mind.
We never said anything about talking to
each other.
An occasional "Hi" wouldn't hurt
would it?
Now as I think of you the tears start
to fall.
It's such a topic that it's hard to talk
about it.
If you wish for life to go on as
it is.
This is the last you'll hear
from me.
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I enjoyed it.
Can relate. There are good days, but then there are also bad days.
Hope you can move on with your life regardless of the other person.
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Thank you. I sent that to him, & we've agreed maybe we can change things.
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I'm sorry you seem to be having a difficult time.
I hope things get better for you.
as for the poem, I think it's cool that you managed to keep the same format going throughout, but I also find the format a little bothersome, when reading. makes the flow really choppy.
But i suppose that's okay, as this seems to be more of a "get it out" poem than a "write creatively" poem. Too conversational for me to consider it "real" poetry, but I'm glad you can get how you're feeling out, it's very good for you.
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Umm thanks. Well Umm, I'm sorry you didn't like it, but whatever I don't care what you have to say & "real" poetry is based on who's standards? Yours? Or mine? Cause I write what I feel. This site is a place where everyone can come a long & tell how they feel, express what they want to say, & write however they want. And for you to say it's not "real" poetry, it's your opinion & maybe in your book it's not "real" poetry, but in mine it works just fine!
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Yes yes, that is what the site is for. that's what writing is for! expressing yourself in a way that you find appropriate. But the site is also for feedback, and I gave mine honestly. Of course it is of little to no value to you, because I am a random person with an opinion.
My definition of "real" poetry is obviously quite different than yours or someone else's, I was just expressing how I felt about your poem. (hence why i said "for me to consider it "real" poetry." and not "this isn't real poetry.")
It is of no consequence to either of us, I just felt like speaking my mind.
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