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i dont mind as much when him and i fight

today I thought about the day when we were in your car driving at an incline
looking at the seasons change from hot
desert summer to
winter on the mountains

the roads turned ashy and white
they curved and curled


and you had a cool head
a mind to make me laugh and smile
because he wasn’t there


I remember very well the question I never wanted you to ask
because I didn’t want to have to admit that I was a sinner that
my body ached


what I did when I wasn’t spilling my guts to you


ill never forget how quiet you got

and how much you didn’t want to look at me in the face anymore
I saw you crawl out of your skin
and fall apart
my meat fell of my bones

we talked about why
my body hurt
why I let him touch me
and love me
why I never asked you to do it
in so many words


but I always thought
you should



in the middle of a windy tunnel I held my breath
I wanted to breathe things
that only you could make me breathe

I wanted to never breathe again



because I liked it better when you left me breathless

I liked it better when it was just you and me
not the stupid thoughts and fears that kept us parked in the middle of the darkness




my body hurts

I cant carry a baby and dance around at the same time
I cant not be with him
for more than a day


but I cant be without you


ever.

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  • Hell In Harmony
    November 6
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  • Hell In Harmony
    November 6

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    I remember very well the question I never wanted you to ask
    because I didn’t want to have to admit that I was a sinner that
    my body ached


    what I did when I wasn’t spilling my guts to you


    ill never forget how quiet you got

    and how much you didn’t want to look at me in the face anymore
    I saw you crawl out of your skin
    and fall apart
    my meat fell of my bones




    owch.

    in the middle of a windy tunnel I held my breath
    I wanted to breathe things
    that only you could make me breathe

    I wanted to never breathe again


    i understand





    but not enough

    wuts going on

  • soooo wonderfulll ! (:
    love you dear♥
    i just want to speak the last line, because i know
    just what you feel, and it's like you found your real truth...


  • tollbooth wars
    October 19

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    "and you had a cool head
    a mind to make me laugh and smile
    because he wasn’t there


    I remember very well the question I never wanted you to ask
    because I didn’t want to have to admit that I was a sinner that
    my body ached "


    this made my heart tear in places that had closed,
    and opened my eyes again to what beauty is.


  • Predaw
    October 1
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    I REALLY like the way this flows. It would be great orally. Good stuff.

  • fearlesslyBroken
    September 17

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    "because I liked it better when you left me breathless"
    this is my favorite part because that is the best part of all relationships..whether it is a good kind of breathless or a bad. its still the best part....


  • Kiss the girl--x
    September 13

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    'and how much you didn’t want to look at me in the face anymore
    I saw you crawl out of your skin
    and fall apart
    my meat fell of my bones'

    thats so sad and just like ohw that i got all goosebumpy and wanted to hug you.



    i hope everythings okieish love.


  • etoile
    September 8
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    oh shitt
    this is brilliant.
    you get better every day!


  • catalyst.
    September 7

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    This is beautiful.

    "I cant carry a baby and dance around at the same time
    I cant not be with him
    for more than a day


    but I cant be without you


    ever."


  • heaven all alone
    September 7

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    ughhhhhhhhhh. sooooo goooooooddddd.

    why don't i read you everyday of my life? you're freaking fantastic.

    i loved this.


  • Candy Morphine
    September 7

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    this is fanatastic. i actually very much adore the spacing, it works in perfect cohesion with everything here.


    I cant carry a baby and dance around at the same time
    I cant
    -can't.

    I wanted to breathe things
    that only you could make me breathe
    -that is very beautiful. to the point of breathlessness.


  • A63-Angel
    September 6

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    omg! this is amazing! I absolutely loved it! I mean, I can't even figure out how to explain to you how good this is. you just keep getting better and better. brilliant, little one!


  • Predaw
    September 6

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    "my meat fell of my bones"

    of to off

    You forgot an F

    Sounds like life is tough right now. Hold on. It will always be an agonizing adventure.


  • oldschoolhero
    September 6
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    oh

    D:

    you know ur amazingly confusing right
    =P

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