Ripped semen
Like a bullet to you’re brain
Inside you’re soft remains
Forced hard, you will never lose feeling
But you might lose consciousness
When you carry inside
My ripped semen
Forceful by hand
Hard by nature
No soft centred womb
could withstand
The power I hold in my pen
The power to dab you indiscriminately
You will beg on hand knees
And ache foot by mouth
For each ripped seamen plugged you south
Gasping for the juices
Unloaded with my ripped seed
Into that mammoth of a mouth
I came too close
Always hard and quick
Deep inside her my seed was placed
Ripped semen
She carried in her veins
As I slapped and diced her rear
Gaping I was for ever tear of her body
She swallowed every inch of my perfume
She never knew
My ripped semen was her doom
Like a bullet through her brain
I gang banged her until she came
With my ripped semen
She was internally bleeding
She was sick and out the game
She carried my living seed
My inner self through my ripped semen
Their she lay like a forced virgin
Her only purpose in life was to bleed
My ripped semen
Like a bullet transfusion in her veins
I done her god like a bullet train
Forced fed her, own remains.
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I enjoyed this.
Super dark.
And the repetition is fine in it.
I didn't see an issue.
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Thanks
Thank you i enjoyed writing it. when i reread it back it makes me laugh, especially the last stanza lol
Thanks for taking the time to read it
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Wasn't a bad write. I did feel "ripped semen" was overused a tad bit though.
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Ok
LOL ripped semen is the one though
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Very dark. I love it
. Gatta love it when someone puts kinky thoughts into your head.
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Thank you alley cat I am feeling very kinky today!!
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Wow! I dare say you might cop some bad comments here, or maybe not. Dark and erotic, and perhaps a little over the top. Well thought out bar a few errors I've noticed. Imagery kinda grips one by the throat and doesn't let go until the last line fades from mind. May I suggest when writing your last line to make sure there is no big black gap as is here. Just a thought, anyway well written bar the mistakes and good luck in this contest here.
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dark vader sexed up :)
Well i thought it was hilarious! that last stanza get's me every time i can not stop laughing my arse off
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