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colour me sakura





in the bloomshade of your mouth
each word is blossom,
a pink season
spoken on my skin

I fall without cease; how easily
you translate me

to spring:

orchards tilt. between my ribs
a bird swerves; softly,
the earth staggers
beneath my feet

everything grows wings,
leaving me lovelier,
lighter,

profoundly petal-tipsy












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Sakura is the Japanese word for cherry blossoms. Of course it's spring now in South Africa...always, everywhere...

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  • Shibboleth
    November 23
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    Gorgeous, sublime, staggering... Love it.


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 16
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    this is lovely, so many characteristics and views softly woven into the most pleasing answers to the question, what makes poetic beauty...so it is here...PK


  • inder silver member
    October 2
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    Petal-tipsy...now where did that arrive from...brilliant!


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    September 28

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    bloomshade ... what a wonderful word! Even stood alone on an otherwise empty line, it would still shine with imagery!

    Hard to denote a favourite area in this piece - though I loved the opening stanza, but then found myself loving every other after lol! Loved the end-line.

    Do you have a Lush shop where you live? They are a kind of bathroom-supplies and fragranced nice-things series of shops, and sell a "bath bomb"/bath ball, which fizzes away to nothing when dropped in water. They sell a Sakura variety of those, full of Japanese herbs, flowers, blossoms and oils, which is fantastic!!! (Bit of random info for you there )!

  • Topnotchsy
    September 22

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    Beautiful imagery here from beginning to end.

    I really like:


  • natari gold member
    September 22

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    I was reading your book the other night. I am always drawn in by the pure and vivid descriptions. No one can write with simplicity and perfection as you. I always feel someone gave me an armful of flowers to sort through. As the words feel their way through my brain.


  • chilali
    September 21

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    so pretyy! i love this. congraulations on the silver trophy. well deserved.

    cheers!


  • IronIcecream
    September 19

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    sakura


    seasons are only
    translating attempts
    you get to know about
    how much can tongue
    understand from language




    • Nicolette gold member
      September 19
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      i like the language of nature...of flowers and trees


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 19

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    It’s so nice to read your words Nicky.

    I don’t have much of feminine side, but your words did kind of elicit a tender, higher pitched sigh.

    Congrats on the silver dear friend.

     

    Love,

    mj.

     


    • Nicolette gold member
      September 19
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      i'm glad you don't have much of a feminine side, mj thanks, my friend

  • heylookaneuphemism
    September 18

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    Fragrant and lovely, "a pink season spoken on my skin" beyond beautiful. I feel refreshed reading you again.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 16

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    Colour me sakura gifts unbridled joy to its reader, it may have been awarded a Silver trophy but it is a priceless piece of poetry, it lifts, lifts, lifts the reader from the first flush of a pink season spoken on my skin...the nautural blush and blossoming takes root on the stage of the page and flourishes, nourishes, nurtures and this, this is the only virtual reality I ever want to bear witness too, you poetically paint love and light and for a moment in time, everything cartwheels into a feeling of being just right, of coming home, of the greenest growth. Only a beautiful spirit could pass on this majesty...


    Kudos.


    • Nicolette gold member
      September 19
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      and only a beautiful heart like yours could write such a beautiful comment, as always, Yvette


  • wonderwall
    September 16

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    An amazing piece of delightful beauty.
    I read slowly almost entraced by the treasure in your words.
    Then i got to the last line which made me give a little outloud giggle,
    What a great line.

    profoundly petal-tipsy

    A beauty,
    Wonderwall


  • Cat
    September 15

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    this is wonderful, wonderful... love petal tipsy
    now i shall promptly steal that.. and claim it as my own...


  • Mariana gold member
    September 15

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    The imagery and use of metaphor in this poem is stunning. It gave me wings to soar to places I shall never forget. Thank you for this beautiful poem.
    Mariana  

     

    ~ Waiter, I'll have a glass of whatever she's drinking! ~


  • Sonja
    September 15

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    I don't want to miss this poetical beauty... I feel each line of this great crafted poem. Second stanza is a soft killer...


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 14

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    Exquisite...Alby


  • Allyce May gold member
    September 14

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    Just magic! Your poems are a refreshing frangipani scented breeze amid my sweltering Cayman days! I really don't think you could get any lovelier, Gogo; and you already have wings

    I particularly loved the pink season on skin, though I could eat this poem and marry it and dance with it and lay in a sun-swathed garden with it.

    I will never tire of telling you how brilliant you are. NEVERRRR! *runs away giggling*

    Thinking of you


  • Junebug-
    September 12

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    This is really good. I love the beauty, the flow and the play with words. Great job!

  • Virgoan
    September 12

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    The words wander in the winter...as beautiful flowers.

    One of my favorite Japanese words alive in your poem. I always hear Sakura as a name of a girl and have learned its definition because of anime from Japan.

    Thank you so much for sharing my friend.


    P.S.

    How are you? Are you okay? I don't see you often here (As if I often log-in here nowadays...lol). Take care adamas.



    Hensley

  • daggertrepe
    September 11
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    Beautiful and thought-provoking!


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 10

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    your poetry is as delicate as lace...so beautiful to read.


  • leander Moderators member
    September 10

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    What beautiful romantic piece you show here my dear friend. You're on the lucky side of the world right now since autumn is coming on my part...


  • klassy lassy
    September 10

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    ...and it's been said no one adequately defines love. It does have it's own language, and would not be complete without the wonder. How is it that spring always wings, even the flowers, a bloom of laughter? How can the earth not stagger, her soul inebriated by such elixirs that bequeath heaven?

    Karen



  • Namita
    September 9

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    aww..this is blooming; unpetal-ing itself through the page...leaving the smoothness of spring on the reader's mind... beautiful... of course, your poetry's in ever-spring too; always, everywhere...


  • trekkergirl
    September 8

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    This is indeed a lovely write. Written very well. Flows excellent. I love reading your work. Thanks for sharing this wonderful write with us.


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 8

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    x 200

    thanks for writing beautiful poetry.
    this is so gorgeous.. i love the bird swerving between your ribs!


  • Cannonsfire
    September 7

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    You don't need me to tell you how I see your poetry...in every shade C


  • thepoetssoul
    September 7

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    What a beautiful piece of poetry, and a most beautiful blossom indeed. Reading this poem is like winning the golden ticket to the wonka factory South Africa in spring how wonderous. Thank you for sharing such a brilliant write.
    Smile always

    Tony


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    September 7

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    applause goes here

    Lines and images like petals of a perfect bloom ... I'll be back to enjoy this again and again ... it has wonderful mouth feel and that first line reminds me of reading Dylan Thomas aloud.
    Thanks for this. So beautiful.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 7

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    This is stunning, I always love where your poetry leaves. With a soft sigh in my heart. Your imagery is so elegant, and I, myself loved that last line, perfect. best to you hun in this contest


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    September 7

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    i just adored this..
    but I dont think you gave me enough credit as a reader- feel free to delete my comment but with the use of Sakura, blossoms, spring, and orchids.... i think your last line would be so much stronger if it were just 'profoundly tipsy'
    it would give me more the feeling instead of a dead tell to the end?
    but- this is just me
    to me leaving it less told sends it into many different directions of interpretations- drunk but on what..... what part of the blossom... can that be left to me? maybe i like to suck the stamen hee hee

    anyway, I truely hope i have not offended.... I did so find TONS of beauty in this and just spoke out my ass of an irk for me

    forgive me


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    September 6

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    "I fall without cease; how easily
    you translate me
    to spring:"

    love that! you are a maestro of words....the way you string them together is fantastic


  • katelynmcdougall
    September 6

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    "I fall without cease; how easily
    you translate me

    to spring:

    orchards tilt. between my ribs
    a bird swerves; softly,
    the earth staggers
    beneath my feet"


    That is some excellent writing. The whole poem is great, but that just makes my heart melt.


  • SabaSophiya
    September 6
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    AWESOME


  • Randomly Beautiful
    September 6

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  • charcoal
    September 6

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    life seems pretty pink and beautiful, after i read your poetry (:


  • Jersene gold member
    September 6

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    ooh, love 'petal-tipsy'

    and the airy, whimsical feel of this, Nicolette. So nice to read of springtime, in autumn


  • Mari Goes gold member
    September 6

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    You and flowers, always such a pleasant combination.
    The ideas you create, the ways you use the metaphors, simply lovely

  • pocket pixie gold member
    September 6

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    oh

    hold on tight
    don't let go

  • grm
    September 6

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    your poetry is your garden, liefie...as beautiful, lush, and colourful as your love.

    i am always impressed by your affinity to nature, to flowers, and always touched by your romantic words and heart



    altyd



  • Night Hope gold member
    September 6

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    Your middle stanza is a complete collection of the finest poetry bookended by rare feathers and intricate lace. Gorgeousness, Woman. Good luck in Mariana's contest, my dear Friend.




  • Shakes-spear
    September 6

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    This reads and smells sweet

    just like you! I love the way cherry blossoms smell! Your word choice is always so good and you write well too! Hope you are having a great day! the Shaker


  • Mad Moon silver member
    September 6
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    Just...


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6

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    cherry blossom words and kisses are sweetly divine yet slightly sour too, enough to hold a relationship together with the yin and yang of life... most brightly coloured red today nicky... lubblyjubbly


  • Heroesrox
    September 6

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    Lovely work as usual, Nicolette. I knew what sakura meant, and I ADORE Asian culture, so I instantly clicked on this to see what you had penned! Thank you so much for the share. Good work and best of luck in the contest!

  • Peteskid gold member
    September 6
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    a feeling here that there simply cannot be too many petals, or too much of this wonderful spring air...lovely...PK


  • Malabu
    September 6

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    your poems give me wings
    and I become
    dew
    on petals
    of spring flowers

  • Rowan gold member
    September 6

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    I'd love to be petal-tipsy...
    sighs. Beautiful Nic. hugs, k.


  • arafura gold member
    September 6

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    It is spring here too. You paint a great picture poet! I feel a little tipsy from the reading...


  • Emmyb gold member
    September 6
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    yes this is pretty. spring is a magical time.

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