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Fathomless Deep



Fathomless beneath the waves
and sinking sweetly to the swish
bright below the sun that's shining
yellow wrapped in silver lining
forgotten memories I leave behind from the moment
when I make contact with the waters reflection
loosing my sense of myopic direction
lost in thought now seemingly stagnant
but the salt from the sea keeps it sweet
blinded by the bright light
found deep in the blue kiss
which breaks like the tide on soft lips
where ever I may be

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  • Angelflower
    September 20

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    oh another one that was lost to me.. this is just not fair. lol. I'm glad that I'm catching up on all the ones that I never read, or at least don't remember reading..


  • eirini
    September 5

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    cool

    This is really nice, I like the imagery. Reminds of something... like a bottomless pool? 'Found deep in the blue kiss' real sweet.
    Just one thing, I think usage of a little more punctuation would help the flow of the poem.