Are you sure my dear that rose is red?
Because all I can see is that my love is dead.
It has drooped and has become rotten,
Just like the love story that he’s forgotten.
Like this rose he stung so harsh I cried,
When I found out his little dish on the side.
Honey, trust me when I say real life is twisted-
He never loved me, not like I wished he did.
Two roses now grow round each other,
A picture of two headstrong lovers.
Either rose is not meant to be my self,
One is he and the other his dirty elf.
Her thorns are as sharp as my angry knives,
Together against me, how will I survive?
Twisted is a world that everyone lives and breathes-
Things always change and it’s finally hard to succeed.
Author notes
S W E E T S I N S- that's my name!! 
A contest entry
- Head vs Heart (quickie, prewrites allowed) by BeachBum1.
550 points, ended October 31, 33 entries
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wow, i love this, exactly, i can relate
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stunning
this wowed me, everything about it was really well constructed, your word choice was excellent, your metaphors were strong and continued to amaze me, the imagery leaked into my thoughts and painted vivid pictures that conveyed to me raw and jagged emotions. Loved the way you invited us to read with your rhetorical question, and how the last stanza brought us through time into the present. the word twisted was a good way to describe being inter wound with another and a rose the perfect symbol of love turned on its head to construe an entirely different feeling! well done on this excellent piece good luck in contest thank-you for entering
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I loved it, very well written and the way you worded this poem definetly hit the mark of "twisted" or "being twisted" in a good way of course! i enjoyed it very much.
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wow... out of all the twisted rose poems... this one was probally more towards the top... however one of my rules was name in AN... if you could do that. Thank you for entering.
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I've done that now. Thanks for your comment!
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love the flow, although at times it seemed forced like the lines
dish on the side and his dirty elf. but other than that I enjoyed this piece very much!If you could please place your option number and title you used from the list in your author notes I would truly appreciate it as it helps me to judge fairly.
thanks so much for entering
and best of luck to you in this contest
and in the future
andi
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i love the background, the font and best all the poem..specially the last line.awesome..
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