Whose clothes are these on floor and chair?
He’s sleeping in the bedroom there.
He will not know I’ve picked them up.
His mind is slow; he will not care.
My little man must think it odd
To find his shirt is free of sod.
His clothes are folded in a drawer,
Or hanging neatly on a rod.
He gives his sleepy head a shake,
Wonders if there is some mistake.
He’s certain a monster has come
His sleepy head, not yet awake.
I get so tired, sometimes I weep,
Cleaning his room, while he’s asleep.
I’ve miles to go before I sweep;
I’ve miles to go before I sweep.
Apologies to Robert Frost
Stopping By Woods On A Snowy Evening
written in 1923
A contest entry
- Time to rhyme "2" by Legend.
3500 points, ended September 11, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I looked up the poem by Robert Frost and really you did a great job in keep with the rythum and flow with this. I say you did a very good job. Best wishes to you in the contest
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A lovely gentle poem, a lot of tenderness also.
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A mothers lament but just a dim and distant memory for me
good write. Good luck in the competion
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I like it. kind of different but it is good as always, kountryann
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Good
I am not a fan man O.K. lol kidding just kidding. has good word count and great flow but all in all wasn't my cup of tea top much reality here ! hahaha. I'm running out of words to say so I say very good job keep up the work and don't slew dragons irt gets tiring ! mel.
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aaww..wow
this sounded like a song! and what inspiration you drew from..Robert Frost? wow.. yeah you got some serious talent.. i loved this..
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yes but it works
That reiteration simply works! And we get our inspires where ever we can... Frost is a good one. I enjoy your poetic voice. And your poetic devices, Nice pen!
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LOL...I love that Robert Frost poem too and think you did a real good job with this lovely piece of work. Made me chuckle and think ...yes been there too! and sick of picking things up after others lol. Well done and good luck.
Shaz xx
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I love it Sometime ago i did a parody of the same poem. It lends itself so well to it I love the original by Frost but this one had me smiling
Excellent Good luck in the contest
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