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[ How finely does fate weave our ]

How finely does fate weave our

paths that intertwine

Every detail so perfectly c

                                      a

                                        r

                                          v

                                            e

                                               d

 

H O W E V E R

 

      We delight in                                                     Dreaming

 

 

 

                                    We forsake our fears

                                                       The fear of

The TRUTH

 

[How frail each thread that binds us to our hope, really is] 

 

The carpet on witch we so carefully tread

W-I-T-H-E-R-S

                           and

                                    frays

But so easily lost

                        In the deep

                                         aybiss

                                                   Were each B-U-R-N is

 

 

 

          Hidden....

 

How complex the fine workings of fate are...

 

Each T

        W

        I

         S

          T

            I

           N

          G 

             route

 

No matter

                                                    How

                                                            It comes

  About

 

Finds its own center of G

                                   r

                                   a

                                   v

                                    i

                                    t

                                    y  

 

               Each

  r    k   

B   o   e    

                             < Heart 3 Will eventually m-e-n-d

 

And those whoes paths are ment to cross and stay bound for 

Eternity

          Should

NEVER

be c / e /v /e /r /d    

 

Those who brake such -Paradise-

Should have to

 

PAY

$    

 

But if fate is kind (.Y.)......

And all goes as planned

                                 I will not burn your haven

                                                                        

If you promise me you will return                                       hers...                   

 

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Comments

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  • angels of the night silver member
    September 19

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    i love your style for this poem.
    the wording is great.!!!
    just work on some of ur spelling

    -angels of the night


  • xxCodykinsxx
    September 8

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    wow

    i loved this. the style is awsome. just work on the spelling a little


  • Cannibal Col
    September 6

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    Amazing

    You certainly do have a way with words....or should I say text. You might want to work on your spelling. Otherwise, wonderful work. I love it.


  • Karra-Mayy
    September 5

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    wow

    i love it

    the set up is awsum

    i would never have thought to do that!!!


  • Valerien Raven
    September 5

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    It's very good hun .

    There are a few spelling mistakes but apart from that, it's a brilliant piece.

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