I was a happy child once
Covered in smiles
No pain, just laughter
I believed I was only a step away
From my happily ever after
Then I was ten
My world cracked apart
My family was my world
And without a word, they
Were apart
Their separate ways
Dealing with their own pain
I was left
To understand, no gain
A child without her parents
A child without protection
Without a big sister or brother
Because they were all to busy
Trying to deal to bother
Wasn’t I worth it
Completely forgettable
Seven years
And still completely unmemorable
Author notes
my sister has acute depression and when everyone found out, my whole world collapsed, my parents divorced and still now i don't think that everyones got over it or even realized I'm here.
Comments
1 - 23 of 23
-
Well done!
Congrats on being Featured,
Sept. 8, 2009! ~ Tim
-
I am sorry,
when you feel and need love from
your parents, let them know that you
need them, parents need to be more involved
without jugements or fear, just listen to you
i am here if you ever need someone
ss
with love and blessings
Rend
-
Wow, this is so deep and sad! I am sorry that you are going through such a rough time in your life right now. I do hope that things work out for all of you and that in the end, they will come to remember and acknowledge you. Thanks a lot for sharing this write with all of us here! Take care and I wish you all the best in love and life!
Jeremy0826
-
i think it is difficult for me to say this is a incredibly honest poem written with passion, when the subject matter is so very sad...having experienced it myself..but it does get better as they say time is the great healer..i know that is not much compensation but...it does...take care
-
I like the title to the write ... one sees the tenuous aspect of life, the surface and how easily things can be pulled apart.
last stanza is also strong. thanks for the write.
-
a good poem, ah family life and how it can all go out of the window when parents split up and depression rears its head, not nice. i hope times get better and you can dance to smiles again.
-
-
thank you so much, i'll get there i'm sure and ill make the rest of my family join me.
-
-
My parents got divorced and for bout 2 years i had depression because of it, so i can completly relate. very nice, i like this alot.
-
-
thankyou, i just saw one of your poems and it is quite beautiful.
-
-
Hmm. It's a good poem, full of emotion.
I can't say that I can relate to this but I'm sorry for all the pain that has been inflicted upon you and your family.
-
-
it was a very difficult time so thankyou, but it was a long time ago that it happened, things keep flaring up so i wrote this. i've read some of your writing and its really good.
-
-
Oh the world of divorce. It affects so many people. It's so sad... =/
I liked this.
It showed the world of divorce so clearly through your eyes.
Great write.
xoxo.
-
-
thankyou so much, comment on some of my other things.. if you like anything else :S
-
-
This speaks clearly of what happens to children of divorce. Yet as you are sad now my heart goes out to you, i can clearly feel the pain and emotions in this write.
I have no criticism, but i can say as a mother of 4 kids who went through my divorce from my ex husband..this too shall pass your life will be smiles again one day.
My kids were your age it was hard for me to tend to each ones depression the first yr. Their grades dropped lots of confusion and tears.
Alot my own tears.
Now we have pulled it together and they are finally their lives in a constructive way.
It has been said many times even though i know you won't feel this now..
This will pass but in the meantime write your heart out.
I started writing crying over my keyboard late at night for a long time i found the more i wrote how i really felt the stronger i got.
I loved this because you used your raw thoughts,
Congrats on being Featured!
Hugs
~Lisa~
-
-
i am really glad it has worked out for you and i do understand it will pass. i'm just waiting really, thanks for the understanding and encouragement. i'm going to visit your site now.
-
-
It is a difficult thing life, divorce, seperations and even severe depressions. It seems that everything gets in the way of just trying to live let alone survive in a world of carnivores and emotional deprevations.
I am sorry you had to live through that cycle of hell and I sure hope you find your happily ever after as you will see we do not all have to descend into the abyss as one big group.
awannabepoet
-
-
thankyou, yeah it will get better eventually. i hope but thanks for the encouragement.
-
-
Poems are meant to convey feelings and your poem does an excellent job. The emotions come through very clearly. I also found your poem very moving and relate to it (I have a poem called Losing My Mother). Definitely keep writing! Welcome to the group. Many, many great poems to read and absorb.
-
-
thankyou, yes i read your poem called losing my mother and found it very deep. thanks for the encouragement. i think i might try a happy one soon, hah
-
-
its great
maybe u can under some lines about faith,the poem is too hurting,it paints a clear picture of what kids go thru as a result of divorce.U did justice to the poem
-
-
Yeah i tried to fit in broken trust and faith smashed (not written like that) and it didnt work aswell as it could so i gave up. but thankyou for the pointers, im glad to hear any more ideas on other poems aswell.
-
-
You Are Featured!
Welcome to Today's Poem!
I found this piece deeply moving and about a subject many people can relate too. The ANs sum the whole piece up nicely. Well written.
You ask for constructive criticism, and I offer you none -- other than to continue writing from the heart like this! Form and structure will develop on its' own as you write more and experament with various ideas.
~ Tim
-
-
thankyou so much it is very humbling to hear that you have no constructive critisism and that you liked it. i didnt even know i was featured untill today. thankyou.
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 23 of 23
