She is made from just pure sin,
Tearing you down, limb from limb,
You don't know what's going on,
And when you do, you are all gone.
A lover of hate,
A hater of love,
She comes from the ground,
And rises above.
You think she's an angel,
Come to save all,
Then she quickly becomes,
A man eating wolf.
Midnight black hair,
Grey and black eyes,
Burning your skin,
A devil in disguise.
Dainty small nose,
Pale white face,
Wherever she goes,
She attracts any race.
She takes out your heart,
And rips it in two,
She takes all your money,
And then says "We're through".
She is made from just pure sin,
Tearing you down, limb from limb,
You don't know what's going on,
And when you do, you're all gone.
Author notes
This is the first dark poem I have ever written...
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A contest entry
- 1000 points, 1000 pws by Shadow Anonymised.
1000 points, ended November 23, 1060 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
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Izzy darlin I dont think you should be bothering with all this darkness....Get out in the light and shind...uncle Dan
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Hey, sorry, but since the contest is already closed and you still didn't put your username in the AN, I have to DQ you. Thanks for entering :]
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I find dark poetry mysterious and was writing dark at your age and there forward. I find it amazing that you have that much talent to create a write this descriptive at 11 years old. I loved it. read my poem down there in the link. I wrote it when I was your age. I also find it disgusting that someone would down on a great write because of your age and the level of darkness or anything non- happy that the poem holds. Most eleven year olds know a lot more than people think, and are at an age where they can understand feeling. Most of the great minds start young. Remember that. Good job.
lolz
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Please put your user name, spaced out, in the author's notes like this;
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along with a link to your other entry in my contest. Without these, I can't judge you, and you will be DQed.
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wow...sounds like people are her prey and shes a great preditor...
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this is really good! i only have two applauses left, so here you go!truley amazing, and you are 11 too! so am i, and i dont think i could top your poams, but if you want to read some of mine, go to my page! ill be reading and searching for more of your writes!
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Dark poetry from someone of 11 years is quite something. I think it's rather good.
Would you like to read some of mine? (I am probably old enough to be your gran, by the way)
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2043859
This one is a sonnet: http://allpoetry.com/poem/1870932
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2021574
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4056787
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I dislike 'dark' Izzey.....so I'll let this one pass me by....but I'm sure it's good
Love Aunty Lu x
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wow..for your first..it's good...keep on writing...especially the dark ones..lol
great write
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