I've been thinking about you day and night. Your eyes are like sunlight radiating through my window. And your breath is as sweet as the melons of summer, the summer when I slept. But now my sleepless nights are filled with crying ever since you left. And now I lay on the cold hard ground waiting for you to call back.
{You think you have everything in the world, and then they turn around and clip your wings.}
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ive edited this like made it longer since it had won the award
A contest entry
- Alright, let's try this again... Quickie lol by perfectsunset.
625 points, ended September 7, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Aww I like it. You can sense the
hurt coming right off the page.
Very nice. =] -
Aww, this was very emotional...
Usually you'd expect poems of summer
to be warm and uplifiting.. this was
warm at the beginning, then it got
cold fast, as the person left.
I know the feeling, and it hurts.
but you've described this beautifully.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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