My dear friend,
I see the pain behind your soft brown eyes,
I see the sorrow, the pain,
I want nothing more than to hug and comfort you
What can I do for you?
I can't erase the things she does to you
I can't erase what happened to him
or with him
I can't take away your past,
But I want to try to make your present better
I try to listen,
and understand,
and soothe
and let you vent.
Am I trying enough?
Feel happy, my friend,
Life is beautiful,
You're a wonderful friend,
You help so many people,
You're a good person who's been dealt
A crappy hand,
And now you're trying to sort out your best bet.
What did you think? and were there some awkward places I should fix...and is it too scattered, do you think?
Comments
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This is a really good poem. I really loved it. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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I feel like your ending lines right now, always seen as the stronger one...until something is said wrong, done wrong, or give a no to doing something...I have soft brown eyes too, my husband used to say don't give me those doe eyes...lol. An excellent write. Blessings.
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"I see the pain behind your soft brown eyes,
I see the sorrow, the pain,
I want nothing more than to hug and comfort you
What can I do for you?"
In these lines I can tell how much you want to help your friend.
It's very touching (:
"I try to listen,
and understand,
and soothe
and let you vent.
Am I trying enough?"
The answer to this is that it is never enough. A friend does need friends to do all of those things, but they need to figure the rest out on their own.
I loved everything about this piece.
It really touches my heart, and I can relate so well.
Thank you for sharing this with us here on AP =)
Best of wishes,
Kati Anne
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