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unmentionable.



















I could pretend you an orifice --
but I guarantee you'd try
to open me up in hulahoop stitches.













and
                                            to be honest, I'm rarely honest
                                    with myself.














I feel like a bloodclot swims
an everyday path through my brain,
weighting down what I thought
                          was getting better.
                          what I thought could
                          take a backseat to
                          university action and
                          awayfromhomesickness.
but really,
                          I feel like a failure in my
own corpse, too heavy in the
thighs to really make a difference.








is it really true what they say?
is there really
someone else
who wants to
                      napalm
epidermal limbs and set fire
to the sweat glistening like
oil on a kitchen stove?







I could reap you a story of
a boy tracing curves with
soft hands and revolving
intentions --









itfuckinghurts when Tiffany glasses
shatter like my pride as you lift my
shirt; I could

pretend you an orifice
to avoid feeling uncomfortable
with my own,

and sometimes,




              I do.
I really do.
             






-- but I could also mention
how much she hates the
stretchmarks floating
on skin that's never
given birth.













Author notes

prompt: "What ails the truth is that it is mainly uncomfortable and often dull. The human mind seeks something more amusing and more caressing." - H.L. Mencken.

writing this down hurt more than feeling it initially.
it's over the line limit (I think 43 written lines, if I counted correctly), so by all means DQ if necessary.

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Comments

  • division gold member
    October 10

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    this is great.

    i really liked the original imagery.
    not once did i see anything about "stars" or "space" and i thank you for that.

    my favorite part:
    "and to be honest, i'm rarely honest with myself."

    i know that feeling too much.

    great job.
    this is amazing.

    i'm so glad i decided to read this.


  • sharptooth
    September 22

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    43 lines is okay - mainly because you let me know you knew it was over the line limit. and half of those lines are short, so you're fine.

    i loveeed this line:

    and
    to be honest, I'm rarely honest
    with myself.


    i'm rarely honest with myself either.

    this was powerfully written, and i loved your narrative voice.
    thanks for entering!


  • Blueskywonder
    September 16
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    enthrawling!


  • LivingxXxProof
    September 5
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    Jessica. I love you.