the wind was chilly
the day was like any
she heads for her chevy
and opens the door
then waves bye
she pulls out
hoping it be a good day
she arrives at school
she steps out
theres a loud screech
she turns around
a van
is becoming
her doom
she saw edward
then he was right beside her
she was saved
but how
the van
was outta contol
yet he stopped it
with his shoulder
imprinted on the side
how is this possible
how did he move so quick
why is his family angry at him
they dont even look worried
he whispers to me
are you alright...
i look at him
not even knowing ive hit my head
Author notes
prompt 3
twilight
f o r e v e r y o u r s l o v e
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Comments
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A very explict description of the van crash. Lovely!
Thanks for the entry.
~Kathryn -
Great write... I am a twilighter myself... I love the way you have described the scenes.... its excellent in capturing the story...
here's a suggestion... check the person you have used in the lines.... u have addressed bella as she, in the first verse.... while in the end you have addressed her as I.... correct it
thank you for entering .... and all the best
Aalta
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This was rather sad. And moving. I enjoyed this though. Thank you for entering and best of luck too you in the contest. Keep up the amazing work.
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clever. very clever.
really sad, but it works. you definitely have a strong storyline here, but is it strong enough...?
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awsum..no better words than just brilliant.. i just love this..bravo!!!
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really great the ones who didnt watch the movie yet could start by reading that!!!good luck!!
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Omg. This one is excellent. Bravo
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