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Island

And now you climb into the blue
And if you like I'll come with you
We're in the clouds, we're on the moon
We're in the sky, it turns maroon
We feel the sun, it's spinning round
We hear the stars, their silent sound
I'll pluck a little, yellow rose
The pastel scent will tickle your nose
Water pours onto the green
It's bright and big and aquamarine
We splash, we sigh, we laugh, we fly
And on the purple sand we lie
The leaves are turning orange and red
The indigo sky is overhead
All this came with words, just two
I love you darling and yes, "I do"

Author notes

SPADES

Option 2

p u m p y k i n Someone I love

Lol I wasn't expecting this to come out as a poem about my marriage, but it did For my hubby

Sister, best friend, cousin, etc...whatever seems just right

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  • DeadlyTurnip
    October 17

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    That was so awesome!!!! Great use of both prompts, and it was really cute. I like romantic poems

    It fit together well. Your description was playful, beautiful, and entirely comprehensible.

    Thank you for entering!


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    October 16

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    This is amazing.... it flows BEAUTIFULLY! and it fits together perfectly. Right on! Awesome job!

  • Virgoan
    October 10

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    I like the sound of the piece - young and vibrant.

    Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

    Regards,

    Hensley

  • H.f.s
    October 1

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    really nice!!! I so much like the rhyme an the imagery!!! good luck in da contest!!!


  • mgmc gold member
    September 17

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    Wonderful poem So very colorful. I love the way you use all of those colors. Beautiful imagery and a great ending. I very much enjoyed reading your poem!


  • lost-angel
    September 16

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    aww thats so sweet and lovely, thank you for entering


  • Random Renee
    September 15

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    awee so sweet! I really liked the flow and happyness in this poem! good write and good luck hun thanks for sharing!


  • lesbian-in-love
    September 14

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    This was good. Really interesting. I especially liked the lines:

    I'll pluck a little, yellow rose
    The pastel scent will tickle your nose


    You were added to the finalists. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • C J Weatherholt
    September 7

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    It's beautiful and wonderfully written. Love the title. If you wouldn't mind put what family member you would like to be in your author notes Thank you for entering!!!


    • pumpykin
      September 7
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      Thank you I don't know lol sister, best friend, cousin, etc....whatever seems just right ^-^


  • Purple Eyes
    September 5

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    Awwwwwwww

    Before anything else the purple sand bit is my favourite
    i really like the slight wrongness of this, the touch of unreal, pushing the boundrys of normality while remaining accesable.

    This is just lovely lovely and your husband is a lucky man and i hope he writes you nice poems or something

    awwwwwwwww x


    • pumpykin
      September 5
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      Thank you, I'm glad you like it Lol he woud write me poetry if he could but he's not much of a poet


  • sultan gold member
    September 5

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    Tenderly endearing ...

    ... in your honest and open adoration and devotion for your spouse. I haven’t seen a lot of this sort of thing in life. I like it a lot. Warm regards, Sultan.

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