Mama’s lying unconscious on the floor
I just hit her with a two by four
Daddy said, “Hold on son!”
“Let me get you a gun.”
Mama won’t be mean no more!
Mama won’t be mean no more.
Mama’s bleeding out on the floor
EMT’s are knocking on the door
So I shot her again
Before letting them in
Mama won’t be mean no more!
Mama won’t be mean no more.
The EMT’s are kneeling at her side
I stand there holding the gun with pride
They asked, “What happened son?”
I said, “It had to be done.”
Now Mama won’t be mean no more!
No, Mama won’t be mean no more.
They zipped her up in a body bag
I said, “Good riddance you old hag!”
As they wheeled her out
I heard the Angels shout
“His Mama won’t be mean no more!”
“No his Mama won’t be mean no more.”
No, my Mama,
Won’t be,
Mean,
No more.
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wow amazing love it!!!!!!!!!!!! great job
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Amazing
I loves that poem, as i do many others of yours. Thank you for being who you are, and such an amazing poet! -
I am never shocked at the stories you have to share. I really enjoy reading them because it makes chills run up the spin of my back. When something has an effect on the readers, thats when you know your a good writer.
This however isnt my favorite that you have written. We get the gerneral idea of what partakes in this poem but somehow I wanted more from it.
Good write.
-Kristen
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AHHHHHH!!!!!!
Kristen;
Okay i am going crazy now!!! So amny people tell me they like my writing but that I write too LONG of pieces!!!! So I took one and shortened it, while still holding to the story to be told from it, and now it is too SHORT!!! AHHHH!!!! I can't win!!!! LOL I will post up the longer version later, and then you can let me know which one you like better, as if I have to even imagine which one it will be!!! Thanks for the comment,,,,,Travis -
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xD Everytime you write, its because your heart has a story to tell. Dont shorten it or make it longer for anyone. As long as it tells your story the way YOU wanted it to be told, then its good enough for the world to see.
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