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Beginning to Shine

I feel your skin,
with the light dancing in your eyes.
Dawn is breaking,
with lips so close-
I don't want to feel guilty,
it brings too much pain.

You haunt my dreams;
All I see is you.
Alone and naked,
you're beginning to shine.
The story continues,
bringing the question;
Where are you going to go?
Slowly time slips away,
Leaving me unafraid-
I want you to take my breath away.

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Hum.. curious thoughts invade the mind

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  • HystericalHeart
    September 17, 2009

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    Interesting. Good visual. Use sceniory to make it better. =) I like the first stanza best. The ending sounded strange and on off beat.


  • Delete---
    September 4, 2009
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    babe this is so beautifull
    <3