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2 Men 2 women

Those 2 poor men..All Alone in the world.
traveling everywhere-affraid to talk to the two poor girls.

Where they slumber-Is unknown.Where they wonder-Noone goes.

The two nervous girls,watch the two boys,hidden in shadows,plain out of site.

They meet  in an Alley,dressed in theyre best.the two men in a black and red vest,the two beautiful women in a plain all black dress.The girls look so pretty

and the boys oh so sweet.Forever they walked,talked,and held hands/They listened to music,and danced at good bands.

As the dancing was over,the night neared its end,both boys layed a kiss,on a single girls hand.Theyre voices were oh so like bells,a sweet symphony of songs,and saidor I must go,the day is at end-But when Im in town,Ill see you again.

And they dashed to theyre horse's,and ran out of town,the two girls watched after,and cried while they slept.Not two months later,in crept the men.

Never to leave the two women again.

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 5

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    This sounds like an interesting outline to a novel to me; it works as a poem but I'd love to see this extended one day Let me know if you ever get the chance, you can post stories here that will show up on our sister site but also appear on your page here

    Please be aware that the background makes this difficult to read without highlighting, perhaps a plain black background would work

    I hope you enjoy AllPoetry and continue to share your words with us

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 5

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    welcome to all poetry

    Wow, I'm so sorry but I cannot read your poem against this background, if you could fix the wallpaper or the font I'd be happy to revisit.


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