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Repentance

In reverence I kneel
before the alter
of absolution.
Seeking
divine redemption,
as my innocence
drips down my inner thighs.

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Inspired by "Absolved" by Estrella Felina

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 16

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    Your use of brevity is tight as you present your statement - the loss of innocence is so prevalent in this image.
    Well done. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 16

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    I believe you meant altar, not alter...
    The whole of this leans towards the raw and semi-obvious.
    I could not attach any emotion to this piece as I read and reread.
    It seemed a statement, so factual in voice...
    But the imagery is so deserving of feeling. Blue