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Rise to Fall the Wall ( Gold )

 

China walls crumble to dust

push weight upon symbol of divide

under duress as East met West

 

Graffiti stains once painted in red

messaging time in high scales of mind.

Lesser our thoughts

to World wars of two

salutes to the fallen

in ashes of cinder.

 

Ice thaws the frozen

captures released

enemy gates ripped wood and torn.

 

Language our tongue

raise the standard guard

twisting pole as the flag nations us all.

 

Half mast she flutters

in petals of crimson

and the poppy fields scatter

in rivers once running in blood..

 

 

 

 

Author notes

-fresh paint on walls of history

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  • Nisaba M.
    November 23
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    Are you merging the imagery o the Berlin Wall with the Great Wall of Shina there? IT reads like some great, mythic wall that is neither of them, but partakes a bit of both of them. Nice, evocative writing.


  • penman gold member
    October 8
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    Excellent

    What a great write. And so deserving of the gold. Congratulations


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    September 28

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    My thoughts exactly
    not quite my thoughts written brilliantly
    God bless you my friend...


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 23

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    "Half mast she flutters
    in petals of crimson
    and the poppy fields scatter
    in rivers once running in blood.."

    Enjoyed this.

    Congrats.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 22

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    This was absolutely brilliant.
    Spoke to my soul in so many
    ways and gave me something
    to ponder over deeply. Your
    metaphor and visuals here
    are seamless.

    I just adore this tender piece.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • daviscth silver member
    September 8

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    Sis, this is such a moving poem for the chosen prompt. You have outdone yourself with writing this. I love the direction you have taken it while I chose a totally different route. Good luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 7

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    I think you have painted the picture well here hun of the wastefulness of war! Well done.


  • Swtpoetryman
    September 6

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    WAR? WHAT THE HELL IS IT GOOD FOR?

    Half mast she flutters
    in petals of crimson
    and the poppy fields scatter
    in rivers once running in blood..


    And lets hope & pray that with this coat of fresh paint that the rivers will run as blue as the sky on a clear and lovely Summers day - and no more blood will be run and flow in the rivers here or anywhere else due to some God forsaken war - which is only good for one thing - which is reducing the number of people on this planet - unnaturally - which isn't a good thing a 'tall if you ask me! GOOD LUCK in this contest with this thought provoking and vividly painted and penned piece.

    Peace & Love!
    Earl.

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