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Sailing on Black Concrete

Oh wandering mind
where have you gone?
you were once so fixed
I took on more then I could handle
when my love went sailing, you were vexed

well she didn't go sailing
by way of boat on sea
no she went sailing on
black concrete

down from the city limits
of our old haunt,
where all the tragedys
made us who we are
to a place where
I knew nothing of

I've tried on so many different faces
yet with her I never had to fake

So my mind will wander
with the likes of lost ghosts
chasing circles of thought and will
down black rows of concrete highways
back to the lives we live separately

Where minds and hearts are together forever

Though far apart in the real world
We have are dreams to treasure

know the depths of love

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  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    September 4
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    This is good and well written. I liked the word useage and imagery when you read it. keep up the great job Heather