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Symphonic Rain

 

 

                  Hazed day dreaming, and I'm hiding inside these clouds.

                  Drenched in dancing precipitation as I'm singing through

                  the downpour. Faithful tones that slide through your

                  fingers and snake toward blistering saturated pavements.

 


    Falsetto left unsang as we fade into the

    backdrop of silence and uncertainty.

    Closed eyes showing romance through

    imaginative figments of light. Filtered in

    brightness; clamp those eyelids and let

    the mascara blur so it all just dissipates.

 

 

 

Scattered as they splatter. Vanished as a moment in time.

Author notes

Title subject to change at better sugestion. I was at a loss. Random stuff from boring classes. Enjoy. Shorter than my usual. I thought it worked nicely though. Opinions?

it is what it is. find the bottom of the cup and tell me what it means.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Vulgarity
    September 16

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    Incredible! I can really feel it. The title is amazing because it makes the rain less of a monotony and into a much more romantic symbol.


  • Hikari Lady
    September 3

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    ' Closed eyes showing romance through
    imaginative figments of light.'

    These lines were great, I find the title quite suitable for the poem. You have used some great imagery and metaphor here, both I enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.

    Love
    ~Noor