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where was I before I dreamt

ground with salt
between my eye - barely peeled -

and Bohemia, naked and lost








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  • Fug-azi
    September 21
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    ticks all the right boxes for me


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 21
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    Gosh, I love this!


  • Naridill gold member
    September 21

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    I agree - I cannot recall the last time I saw Bohemian in a poem. Well, unless you count Dandy Worhols song. But this is indulgent.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    September 9
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    Bravo!

  • Rowan gold member
    September 4

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    It's not too often you see Bohemian in a poem! Very succinct and painful. Well done Kate.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    September 3

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    Flipping great stuff! The images you managed to pack in with so few words is astounding. Honestly.



  • Night Hope gold member
    September 3

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    Your last line alone is more than enough to inspire reams of poetry, my Friend. Good luck in the contest, Scribe.


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