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Life is ending in a dream

Is it over?
Is it all ending before her very eyes?
Will it all end in death,
As she lays there and cries?

Her tears spell out Brittney.
Is Brittney why she cries?
She lays there in tears,
Before my very eyes.

And as i float softly,
I begin to realize.
Im staring down at myself,
As if im in diguise.

Author notes

I actually wrote this out of real experience. I cry all the time and live my life with a best friend/sister that gave me up for a boyfriend who abuses her and disrespects others. They have been together for about 3 years now, but she gave me up on Monday.

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  • Just-Another-Face
    September 19

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    10/10

    I've been there... and it hurts so badly. I love how you portayed the astral projection as if your soul was telling you EXACTLY why and how and where this all happened... It might not make sense what I just said, but I guess it's to make up for lack of the better words I wish i COULD say... this is just amazing and I felt every stinging, sprained feel.

  • Juno101
    September 5
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    I'm sorry for the experience. This is a good poem.