So blind to all
but my illusions,
perceptions
of physicality
fall by
the way side,
floating
like petals
on the winds
of change,
drawn deeper
into the abyss,
clawing
in the darkness
but grasping
naught
but my own
fractured
quintessence,
drowning
in my own
sagacity,
amaurotic
to totality
Succurro mihi�
Author notes
Prompt:"zero visibility"
Pic from http://th01.deviantart.net/fs9/300W/i/2006/013/2/0/Insanity_by_DElevit.jpg
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Comments
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Yup
I actually really like this piece, but.....
this is
something I
asked
not
to
do.. No offense to you at all, it's a great piece of work, can you revise it just a bit please?
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great
wow
a great poem dude
as always
keep up the good work
loved this stanza
So blind to all
but my illusions,
perceptions
of physicality
fall by
the way side,
awesome dude
Jayde
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Every time I read something by you, I add to my list of favorite poems. This is no exception!
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Always a pleasure to read your excellent pieces. You take a prompt and weave it ever so beautifully within your poems. This opening line really hit home with me :
"So blind to all
but my illusions"
It speaks volumes my friend...
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Excellent as always..
fav..
floating
like petals
on the winds
of change,
well done my friend!!!
from start to end
the flow and wordplay rocks
thanks for the share
Darky
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I think many can relate to this
I know i can
Another wonderful piece
it was outstanding with its depth and wordage.
Thank you for sharing bro
Keep the ink flowing
fire
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Succurro mihi…
like the entirety of your poem, the urgent cry for escape from the seemingly inescapable prison of mind.
Dear Poet friend,
thank you so much for joining in this inner-play on the prompt:"zero visibility."
appreciate your voice and talent and time to enter my contest for AP family, friends, and favs.
I do love the expressions of turmoil you express with style, flair and a gentle
tenderness, subtly felt within the vortex of your spirit.
so beautifully done. love how you allowed the prompt to meditate you.
wishing you the best
welcome to the finalists
till then
stay
liquid
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Dynamic!!!
This is a fine piece
The picture along with your word choices
create a chilling ambiance....
My fav lines...
'drowning
in my own
sagacity,...'
Thank you for sharing
and best wishes in the contest
~Pastel
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I've felt that drowning many times. As always, you pen the psychology of the haunted mind brilliantly.
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a most excellent write
I have missed your words, ah sagacity such a lovely word
drowning
in my own
sagacity,
amaurotic
to totality
peace ad love brother dear
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wow very deep and dark my dear brother your words are truly terrifying!!!! This is very well written and portrayed and very very scary!!!!!! As usual a incredible amazing piece!!!! You are so truly skilled and very brilliant!!!!!! I love you soooooo much!!!!!!
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wow this is definitely a dark write. The man in the picture appears to be in a straight jacket. And it seems to me that you were talking like a person with some problems. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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