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Deviant

Missing image
culture
intolerant
of the dissimilar
and fast to label deviants
customs

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  • Allyce May gold member
    September 14

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    My only issue was this is that it feels a little robotic, like perhaps it was not as interwoven as it could have been. I found myself pausing at the end of each line and it interrupted the fluidity of the piece.

    On the flip-side, I'm impressed by the meaning within the poem - so much said in so few words, which is ultimately what cinquains are about

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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    September 4

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    So easly to label,
    so permanent
    the impression.

    Well chosen words to impact the message.

    M-C


  • trekkergirl
    September 3
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    oh soooo true is this one... our society definitely does not care for the one who doesn't fit in with the mold. A different sort always gets made fun of... threatened. Or even destroyed. Very good write. I liked it. Again few words that we well chosen to say a lot. Thanks for sharing this with us.