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Second Best

The one you'd give your world for,
That makes your heart feel free,
The one you vow your life too,
That was never me..

The sparkle in your eye,
That i was too blind to see,
That smile in your voice,
It wasntt for me..

It always always her,
To her, i'd never compare,
Shes pure beauty and perfection,
But cupid wasn't fair..

I was the one..
The one who fell and broke,
But never number one,
On my tounge these words choke..

Shes the one..
The onlyy one..
Who completes your heart..

I am..
I always was..
I always will be..

Second Best..

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  • Maryah
    September 17

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    -remembers my ex-

    This poem hits a sore spot on me. it's moving and shows emotion. I like how the ryhming gets lost as the poem ends because it also relates to how strong you are near the end... i think anyways. good job.


  • blendsintothecrowd
    September 17

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    Wow...why would you revise it? It's powerful, it's moving, it's emotional...I can totally relate to it. In places your rythym could use a bit of work in places...but it could easily be fixed with the removal or addition of a contraction Like "that smile in you're voice it wasn't for me" would flow better if you went ahead and separated the was and not. I do like how you break the rythym toward the end of it...it's very good.