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Counting Sheep.





counting sheep
my breath and the clock
take turns








Andrew Hide
03~04~2004

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Written April 3rd, 2004

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  • Sai Babas Lotus
    January 25, 2005
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    Excellent!

    Aha! This is something my mom enjoyed listening to. She is an insomniac and she said this is greatly penned I think this has excellent imagery and resonates beautifully. I enjoyed the light-heartedness of this haiku as well as its open-endedness. Lovely background as well to boot!

    Best Wishes,
    Charishma


  • Ava Noire silver member
    April 4, 2004
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    Screams insomnia indeed. I hate nights like this. Cleverly penned Andrew, as are all your haiku (even the ones that confuzzle me )


  • SusanL
    April 3, 2004
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    Oh man this screams insomnia... Not what i needed to read tonight... Sleep deprivation is my life...Susan