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Just Another Day In Your Arms

The place were i feel safe
is the bed in which you made
your arms around me
just laying here

yeah there are things to do
but can't they wait another day?
this feels too good
this feels so right
being here
in your arms again tonight

Just another day
Just another way
to show that I love you
to show how right this is

Your arms around me
Your lips on mine
Just another day in your arms

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  • LylaEmoriaCullen
    October 29
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    This is a wonderful poem sis, it expresses the inner thoughts of every girl..... Keep up the good work.......


  • XxJapanesexXxVampxX silver member
    October 15
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    i lvoes it, its absolutly perfect


  • Draig aine gold member
    September 3

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    just another sigh

    it is all we wish for,,another day, encircled in love, is it too much to ask, no grant me one more day

    Draig


  • trekkergirl
    September 3

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    Okay first just a few things I noticed. First line: The word fell should be feel. Or so I think.

    2nd stanza the word is... I believe should be are.


    Those are the only two things that I thought needed changing.

    Okay now to the poem. I gotta say that I really do like this poem. Those few changes that I suggested will only help improve your allready well written work.

    Thanks for sharing this with us.