Sky blankets
of faded silver outlines
embody branched silhouettes
stretched out to evening winds,
slowly clouding crescent halos
in lambent fog ~
and umbrella mist
wades fallen ambiance
to lusting slumber.
born with no direction, I'll just keep on spinning
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Excellent Write
Amazing imagery once again. Your descriptions are so powerful and I really like your word choice. This one also flows very well from line to line.
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BEAUTIFUL, short, but sweet.... an amazing picture to be painted by yourords...thank you for sharing I enjoyed this very much. Write on, Read on, Rock on!!!!
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I love this, the flow is beautiful. I cant choose my favorite part, I love all of it! Very peaceful and flowy (:
Thanks for sharing, Keep writing!
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I see a lot of wonderful imagery here. Good job painting this portrait.
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WONDERIFIC!
Sky blankets
of faded silver outlines
embody branched silhouettes
i love the use of imagery here!
AMAZING!!!!
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roll and spin crazy stone! for a lovely photograph one has here...
w a flash of lightning
-Jas
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I love the words you used, each one must have been very carefully chosen. As for revision, I read "and umbrella mist" as "an umbrella mist" the first time, and it sounded a little better like that to me. But it's your choice. Great job.
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I felt this was a little wordy - as though you had intentionally sought out a few slightly unusual words on purpose, even if they weren't the optimal choice for the purpose! Still, have a clappy.
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Excuse me? Wordy? Hardly. Sorry that I know how to use my vocabulary. I have always written this way and if you don't like it, then don't bother commenting on anything else I write because you won't be satisfied.
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Since you do not welcome polite criticism it will be my supreme pleasure never to waste my breath on you again. Please have a lovely evening.
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Its very imaginative and has great flow. It is short and to the point and It is great! Great job Kerri! Love ya!
and 
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Keep on spinning, as long as you keep on writing, Kerri. Your tales are necessary in order for others to find their own paths. Great visuals in this piece, Sweetie.
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hmm
well as always youre wording is amazing, and the imagery very light and a good amount though hazy enough to be dreamlike very well done kerri that last line was just beautiful
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nice and imaginative
stretched out to evening winds,
slowly clouding crescent halos
very beautiful indeed
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Definitely awesome. You painted the portrait perfectly, used great descriptives, great words.
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mmmmmmm lusting slumber... what a wonderful line!
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