The want i can't have
Is pulling at me
Weaving through my mind
And begging me please
It's an impossible matter
It just can't be
Weaving through my mind
And begging me please
It's a simple decision of a yes or a no
Down on its knees
Weaving through my mind
And begging me please
It's a this or a that
Giving me a headache; my eyebrows crease
Weaving through my mind
And begging me please
The want I can't have
Is pulling at me
Weaving through my mind
I wish it would cease
Author notes
It's aboiut wanting something you know you can't have and it eats away at you day by day. But you just have to learn to deal with it because if you don't you will only get worse. Learn to function because it is a want not a need.
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Good work of repetition again. Sometimes it can be too much, but it does the poem justice in this sense. Everyone wants something they can't have so there's a lot of people that can relate to this one...
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thanks. and are you saying i used it too much in this poem(the repitition) because i thought that myself but wasnt exactly sure so i left it
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No. I'm saying although you have repetition it isn't too much and doesn't drown the poem or cause the reader to get bored with it. You didn't use too much...just enough
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ohh ok thanks bunches! =D im glad i get the approval of my favorite poet haha
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Guess I should invest in my own personal 'stamp of approval' just for you then huh? ;D
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yessss you should
hehe
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I agree with your AN. I can relate to this and i feel the emotions and that yearning for that want in this poem. i like the way you have repeated the last two lines, it emphasizes this wish and puts the image across with intensity. Great work!
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thank you. and do you think i used repition too muchin this poem?
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No don't feel so at all, It suits the poem and as i said earlier, it emphasizes your want appropriately!
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ok well good thank you!
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