there's a stone on my chest again this morning
so i lie down to die beneath it
but when my eyelids slide
over my earthy irises
my mind supplies guitar strings
and i silently play
the notes lift your weight off of me
and my voice starts out so softly
as i strum the strings of fate
"when i trip over my own two feet
when the world is a hard place to be
when my heart is cracked in two
that's when i fall more in love with you
when my tears water the fields
when i broke my arm holding up shields
when i am heartsick and weary too
that's when i come running to you
when i feel empty inside
when the light in me has died
when i cannot pay life's due
that's when i turn and trust in you
whenever life seems short and long
that's when in you i become strong...."
From my heart to your eyes
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A very well done and most poignant piece of verse here... fine work in that everyhing is just slightly understated which is ALWAYS best with poetry... loved it...
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Thanks so much, dear friend =]
-K
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I really enjoyed this
The first stanza is my favorite I think.
Great write keep up the good work
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting
-K
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wow
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Thanks =]
-K
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This is amazing.... it made me cry it's so great..... I've felt this way so many times, and I've never been able to truly express it.... But you did.... I especially liked
"when my heart is cracked in two
that's when i fall more in love with you"
because that's how it always is.... And right when you think you're falling out of love with someone, you end up falling for them again....
Lillie
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Thanks for reading and commenting =] Yeah, it always does seem to go that way.
Much <3!
-K
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BEAUTIFUL...
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Thank you =]
-K
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There are no earthly words to desciribe the beauty that lives in this
absoulte work of art.
It plays like a music box...
soft and meaningful..........
I stand in awe as this stands before me......
Its like this fell to the earth
from a place of glowing magic...
i know someone who does this for me lass...
she writes poetry across my heart and soul
since the very day we meet...
Liam
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is she on ap? i'd like to read her work if she is..... she must be great....
Thanks for commenting hon, you always make my day =]
-k
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nice natural rhyming scheme here that was easy on the eye and pleasing to the mind. You treated the subject matter well, without being too sentimental or corny. i liked it.
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Glad you enjoyed it =]
Thank you for reading and commenting!
-K
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five million thumbs up
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Thanks Mohzer.... *gives hugs* A-hibbik!!
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