Midnights rise
My breath meets yours
Hands grasping
Voices gasping
The heat rises
The moans turn to screams
Hold my hand tighter
Push closer together
Feel the temperatures rise
The flames licking at out souls
The flesh melting away
All in the name
Of a God we won’t believe
The people leave and go home
Tonight’s witch burning done
Sister hearts left to dust
Whisked off along twin winds
Of the night that once was ours
A contest entry
- Please This Dark Mind of Mine by FinalWhisper.
700 points, ended September 23, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts....
Comments
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Good, Potential to be Better
I liked this and at times it flowed real smoothly but for the most part it seems you get toward something just to barely fall short. Like it goes good and then what you have built up in flow just goes eh. But even still the flow is decent and the word use strong.
The ending was a bit of a twist, good way to mix it up.
Thank you for your entry.
Truly and Darkly,
Dirk -
Interesting. I liked the begining most. The rymhes gave is a beat. ^^
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