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Love the Hard Way

I love you
but you don't care
your a fallen angel
with eyes so fair

we met by accident
on a sunny day
we talked for hours
but now your away

I hate you
still I hold on
your troubled I know
the right kind of wrong

the world is full
of fallen angels tonight
I had to fall for you
somethings not right

I love You
but I don't know why
you came into my life
with nothing but goodbyes

I wanna cry
the way you hurt me
makes me die inside
still you set me free

I touch your skin
and I fall apart
something about you
forever stays in my heart

your a fallen angel
no wonder I fell
take me away with you
on your way to hell

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Written April 2nd, 2004

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  • wohadreambig
    April 7, 2004
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    very deep and powerful keep it up
    Janine

  • sweetypie101
    April 6, 2004
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    holy wows. i don't even know what to say. this describes my relationship so well at the moment. it touches me heart so deep. gawd. everything about it is so expressive and tells the story of it well. the closing line is awesome too. hehe. this is definitely an amazing poem. the part that cought me the most was:
    I love You
    but I don't know why
    you came into my life
    with nothing but goodbyes
    *sighs* yeps, just an awesome poem. lol. i really like your author page too. evanesence and linkin park r my 2 fave bands.
    do u have AIM? *cheers*
    *~SweetyPie~*


  • anyonita jenea
    April 4, 2004
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    i love that....i like your opening page too..its interesting...check me out sometime, okay?


  • HobsonDilemma
    April 3, 2004
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    your a fallen angel
    you're*

    this reminds me a lot of a poem i wrote icarus reborn (shameless self advertising) because of the paradox. the way you say i hate you and then a few lines later i love you. but also you add some originality and personal flare when you say things like: the right kind of wrong
    i liked it, i think some of the rhymes were a little to intentional but theres always some of that. cool!


  • Mr Scott
    April 3, 2004
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    Great Flowing, its all so constant with the flow and the message, good job, though it did seem kind of un-interesting after you get to the middle, and you see the pattern, but I definintly feel it.

  • mridontevnknowu
    April 2, 2004
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    nice i can see my girldriend thinking this of my sadly but just back during my days of rehab


  • blue -eyes
    April 2, 2004
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    nice write


  • April 2, 2004
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    THis....I can relate so much.. this is a very very good write..

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