Its fall again
Its harder to stay sane
Walking on my own mind under the leaves
Disguising my tears under the rain's
Stopped at the edge of a cliff overlooking the death valley of love
Condemning every deaf heart for its sins and rejection of love
One more scream I unleashed for every undeserving yet dead lover
After all wrongdoings, over the loved ones their souls hover
Justice is demanded
Court of justice attended
Case heard
Laws amended
Victory over the deaf hearts is the new prophecy
LORD our case is appealed to your feet to be seen
I raise up once with this prophecy in my heart
LORD's justice will be imposed upon all in the final part
The part that closes this case
With the final sentence on this scroll, your souls I will chase
Author notes
Please do watch the video. I decided to treat my readers and add the song that inspired and helped me to write this poem. Yes you wont understand it because its not in English but it will leave you wondering. Besides let the music and video take you away along with the poem lets see where you'll get. I need feedback on this. If you guys like this concept I can add my other poems like this as well so that every experience is mind blowing and unique. I want to leave an aftertaste in your hearts.
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Stunning, and then I played the video...
You go so much better with coffee than the newspaper.
My day is richer for adding you to it.
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your words do much better after a long day than any massage. thanks for your kind heart.
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You know I've been there too
You put it perfectly. I know the feeling exactly, dear friend. -
this was awesomly amazing!!!!!
great penning
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I think this poem was really unique.
Great write.
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i liked this poem alot. it had a different flow but i enjoyed it.
One more scream I unleashed for every undeserving yet dead lover
After all wrongdoings, over the loved ones their souls hover
really liked that line. keep up the writing -
I understood it's style.....it's a fine wine from the heart....to be sipped
upon...and it's thoughts spilled out onto the page
to be wept....to be...cherished....to be gently resounded...
Stopped at the edge of a cliff overlooking the death valley of love
Condemning every deaf heart for its sins and rejection of love
One more scream I unleashed for every undeserving yet dead lover
After all wrongdoings, over the loved ones their souls hover
Justice is demanded
Court of justice attended
Case heard
very very lovely, the song with it...is heart-breaking
and un-raveling!
FANTISIMO!
FANTISIMO!
ears/SEattle
LOVED IT...Loved it!
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It's.
Difficult.
I don't know if I liked it or not.
But I do know that some of you lines seem to drag on for far to long...
Making the flow... Die, if you would...
Maybe it is just me though..
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I like it ...
It's very deep, like the ocean is blue and some parts dark. So there is your poem very deep and doing it's part. great write poet!!!
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I really like it! It has feeling
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Heartfelt, PASSIONATE!
Caught in a moment where all the wronged loves past ...pass in thought, the seemingly deaf hearts and souls that throddened over with no thought to the damages they have done. es cierto yo no intendi bein como eyos estan cantando, pero yo mi gusto los cantandos.
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great job
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wow, hun this has such a powerful affect. definitely a standing ovation. I love when you put the videos with your words. outstanding work as always. thanks for sharing.
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It's absolutely amazing! Thank you so much for sharing this with us. I love Il Divo and I loved the theme and the words you chose. They really describe me cause I'll always be a romantic, but will never find that true love (that won't stop me from searching), and I'm studying law. That's another thing why I love this poem. The line that I find the best is:
'LORD's justice will be imposed upon all in the final part.'
Bravo!
Nela
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AJ,
This is one of your best pennings to date, I love the format and the video you set it to is superb.
Let the lord's justice be dispensed for it knows fury beyond what any human can comprehend.
I like it, I like it so!
PS: Nice new page btw.
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One of my favorite songs from The Promise.
I can see how the song inspired the poem..
It's a lovely song and and an emotional poem. Great Job...
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OMIGOD
That was a beautiful song and a stunning poem. WOW
That was awesome. Thank you thank you thank you for sharing!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Nice work
I like this one, could not see the video as I am at wor but will be checking out the vid when I get home. Wanted to let you know I found a new form I will be trying tonight and would suggest you check it out as well. It is called a Rosarian Sonnet being as it uses couplets as you have right here it might be right up your alley. Love peace and Chicken Grease!
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nicely done
very well written.. full of emotion...
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