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Carousel (Villanelle)

Moons and stars shine through time
Marking memories long forgotten
Balancing on the point in my mind

Morning ray lays light on the shrine
The day Earth appears rotten
Moons and stars shine through time

Eye pierces open although it is blind
Heart seeks no rest on this plane
Balancing on the point in my mind

One sway left and one sway right
Light in the darkest fathoms
Moons and stars shine through time

My thoughts, God can have em
Becuase they were never mine
Balancing on the point in my mind

Carousel of broken horses crying
Universe, I know all the answers
Moons and stars shine through time

Im just a child of a Master in the sky
Grateful to every particle of matter
Moons and stars shine through time
Balancing on the point in my mind

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This was so fun to create, thanks.

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  • Arkbear gold member
    September 3

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    This......>>>>

     

    My thoughts, God can have em
    Becuase they were never mine
    Balancing on the point in my mind

    Carousel of broken horses crying
    Universe, I know all the answers
    Moons and stars shine through time

    Im just a child of a Master in the sky
    Grateful to every particle of matter
    Moons and stars shine through time
    Balancing on the point in my mind

     

     

    ....is why I adored this write.....not sure how it will stack up against a few other entries in Finals.....but you took this Prompt and really made me think....good luck & God bless,

     

    Bear -


    • Justusdreams
      September 4
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      Thanks for the hm, I hadn't written a thing in forever. I really remember much of your great contests and poetry. It is an honor coming from you, thanks for having such great contests that make me feel like writing, such a gift, thanks.