Fury from darkness
I carry my blade
Into the fire
I die this day
Your voice still haunts me
Your sadistic lullaby
The sting, it taunts me
From when you bid me goodbye
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Author notes
Wow....forced rhyming and all that crap. Not to mention that it's not even finished...
I'm really rusty...
Hmm...Thoughts...
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i like it, it can almost stand alone, but i do think like you said you are not finished. this speaks of a greater song, like id have to look backwards to understand the pain. i would want to know what (she i presume) sings, what doom you are walking towards, maybe its all allegorical, but could still be answered in the same fashion. good writing, dont worry, theres good steel underneath all that rust.
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Thanks for the comment. Maybe one day I'll find that spark that ignited the flame that made me want to write this, and then finish it. Until then, it sits unfinished and is found wanting,,,
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