Moon
The moon
The dark moon
The big moon
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Written April 2nd, 2004
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This is very good. The moon is big, and beautiful, and you did a good job describing it. I have to agree with Luckhole that the use of the word "dark" gives it another meaning, which is really cool.
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Loved it!
This is real good, you say a lot in only a few words here.
The moon is cool, I love the moon! Someday when you are a little older you should see this sort of scary, but real cool re-make movie of the old novel "The Time Machine", and see what happens to the moon. www.imdb.com/title/tt0268695/
Have a nice summer!
Unc
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Well I guess that about sums up the moon, a really lovely write.....I do hope you write more soon
take care
sanity.
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this was cute, specially for kids. cute write. keep penning, and thanks for sharing
One love, one voice, One pen
Blessed Little ONe -
Thank you very much.
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Great poem, Jer. I love the moon, especially when it's full. great job.
Jen -
This is really great. I love the moon too. It is really great when it is full and playing hide and seek in the clouds.
This was fun to read.
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the muse has found you early young poet!! this is piece is more than just cute, i like your use of the word "dark" cause it adds a little deeper meaning, at least to me, because in the night sky the moon doesn't appear dark, but it feels that way.
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Keep up the great work Jer.
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Hi there,
First of all I would like to say that wa a good competition idea, I hope you like my poem. ANyway great write, I really enjoyed this and you are only six? Wow you are doing so well, have an applause.
All the best to you, have a great day
BLue moon
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The moon is a pretty awesome thing, isn't it, just like in your poem. A lot of poets write about how it effects their love life but your poem tells us what it's REALLY like
Very good, Jer, very good
Dee
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wow this poem is good dang you are so good very well done you are such a awesome poet do you know that this is just wonderful i am 10 and I cant even write this good!
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ahhhh, no cuss words. thank you for the comment
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Cute
this very good for your age. don't feel bad that its short though cause I have a 13 year old friend (Shadow Rose) who wrote a poem just as short as this one about fairies. Anywho this cute cause I love moons and stars! GO YOU! Great job and keep writing!!
Heather -
Simple is the best sometimes...thats why I write haiku...go ask your mom what a haiku is. Good job!
Peace and love
Susan
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awwww...lol i almost typed a cuss word, great job jer...
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this is so cute...it is so simple but effective, you do better than some adults that just get caught up in all their long words. this has a good effect and made me smile..thank you and keep writting.
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Aww...It is cute and right to the point. Nice Job!
~Kamilah -
aww this is simple but lovely! excellent writin! i love it!
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Thank you for your help and for your comment. I love writing poems.
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okay, this is good for a 6 year old, bu it is quite short. You could have maybe done a few more verses and described it more.
moon
white moon
in the shadows
is the bright moon
well I suppose you are only a 6 years old! you have more chance to get it right when you are older (if ya know what I mean!) -
Your mom has every right to be proud...your poems make me happy.
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Great job on this one. I'm so proud
love you
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