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In a feild near a lake is an engineering facility, with smokestacks and machines to manufacture tranquility.
The metropolis rises out of the ashes of what used to be a forest, and on fifth street is a man who sells plants and calls him self a florist.

there is a trampoline on a submarine called the jumping bean.
It's a systematic experiment in deep water acrobatics, paid for and supervised by the department of aqua-areonaughtical mathematics.

The department of  imagination is charging fees and handing out permits for inspiration. but are not authorised to distribute permits of motivation. In a field near a lake is a bureaucracy facility, with suits and ties to manufacture sterility.

The procrastinating grasshopper robbed the liquor store and got what the ant worked hard to achieve. but got drunk and stupid and died during the big frost of new years eve. the ant colony captured his body, and fed it to ant criminals and ants that were naughty.

street beggars are asking the populous for donations to pay for medication, and the populous is asking the beggars to change occupations .In a ruined building near a homeless shelter is a temporary employment facility, with turnstiles and hard times to manufacture humility.

A recruited soldier learns how to march, learns how to sew, learns how to shoot then learns how to load.
An rocket fired into the jungle violently explodes, and all over the soldiers it gently rains poisonous toads.
In a castle on a ridge is an think tank facility, with soldiers and bombs to manufacture stability.
they built a machine designed to feed a million mouths an hour, but it was destroyed during a riot over the balance of power.

In a cave under a mountain is a physics facility, with robots and computers to manufacture mobility.
the Porsche in the drive way is made up of chemical bonding, just actions of matter and reactions responding

In a shadow near an accident is a the worlds smallest facility, with cranes and towers to manufacture liability.
in a womb in the mother is an egg making facility, where blood and proteins construct fertility.

In a field near a lake is an engineering facility, with smokestacks and machines to manufacture tranquility.
The metropolis rises out of the ashes of what used to be a forest, and on fifth street is a man who sells plants and calls him self a florist.

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  • Nevel
    September 17

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    An interesting piece of prose-poem, a satire. I think the repetition of some lines works well; your piece is very informative done...painted images you observe in your surrounding. An sarcastic reply on society today. Some typos in your piece----> (feild--field) (an--->a) for example. It breathe an entirely imprisoning in systems you describe, even the man as a florist. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Erwin


    • corey strong
      October 10
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      Thank you

      I appreciate it. I am a bit sloppy somtimes. I need to edit my stuff more. Thanks for your comments and thanks for the message, nice meet you! thanks so much

    • corey strong
      October 10
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      thanks so much

      I felt evolved, if only for a short while... thanks so much.