I've been pricked by cupid's arrow
Only for it to end up in sorrow
Happiness and joy today
None tomorrow
Love only complicated a glorified thing
Clouded the proceedings and left a painful sting
Even thought about excepting a ring
A fucking ring..Like you would know the
significance of a ring
Broken hearts mended again and again
Becoming lovers after starting out as friends
Friends we should have stayed
On the freeway of love we should have never strayed
Worthy of multiple oscars
That's a fact ,I must applaud your skills
For my hearts blood
You surely did spill
Author notes
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Comments
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very brutal and well written...i like this part..Even thought about excepting a ring
A fucking ring..Like you would know the
significance of a ring
thanks for your entry good luck and well done -
poor boy...deserves 5 stars
Liam -
Dont ever give up on love baby.....
you could be taking the exit to turn back when it's just up the road a piece.
i love ya gypsy....
but you know that.
Bless ya lass,
Liam -
yes your so right Jade...Some people should just remain friends...Great poem...Dan
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there can be so much pain in loving someone, and the hurt of losing both a friend along with a lover... is worse. glad you were able to get some of that emotion out in this piece.
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Wow...
This is amazing in so many ways.
You put it in the most perfect way ever haha!
This is really awesome!
Keep up the awesome work.
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Ouch! Awesome piece...Rings and bracelets are symbols of bondage...Nicely done, three fingers up
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powerfully written
"I've been pricked by cupid's arrow
Only for it to end up in sorrow
Happiness and joy today
None tomorrow"..Very powerful words, these lines come right out punching. You write with a lot of emotion and it is felt throughout the whole poem. Great use of the prompt, all the best to you in the contest.
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Ouch! What a harsh read this one is! You did great with this one. What a read this one is! I really enjoyed this read!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Wow amazing I love it
I cab relate so much
Great job -
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Nice write... being hurt by all of the lie that they can say... and you write what the title say, "F*C* LOVE"... I feel your pain as all the lie being to faded and see the truth of the once we knew...
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ouch. that is a punch.
I feel like I should hurry up and get out of the way
before I get steamrolled [intentionally or not]
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geez you are in a brutal mood but its a gutsy one
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Now that's bringin it!!!
Best of luck in the contest my friend.
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