Sun, sun
Deep rich sun.
The sun so bright,
sun so warm.
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Written April 2nd, 2004
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10/10 ;)
Hiya, this is so great I really like this it has so much feeling in and considering that your only 7 then like, W0W! lol this is great 10 out of 10 for sure
Great job thanks for sharing trhis and keep up the great work youll get better as you go along 
Rowena Jo -
a'right....because a critical review is invited....i wanted to say i think you might be able to expand this poem and make it better...dont get me wrong i already like it...good job
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Hey, I like this . you have used great words and I loved it. You are such a great poet for a 7 year old! Thank you for sharing this, I will be reading more of your fantastic poems. Keep up the cool work.
chicken100 -
I want to say that I have enjoyed reading your poems, I love the simplicity of your writes, they work wonderfully and as you get older I will follow your work and see how you have grown............Thank you for sharing your work.........
sanity.
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Great poem, Jer! I love the rhythem in this one!
Jen -
you have found your niche, your style is unique and your talent will only grow with you. i'm so glad there's a site like this that everyone can enjoy and contribute to!!
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Very good Jer keep it up.
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What a good poem, Jer... I have a 'Sun' poem too but it's not as good as yours
I hope you stay here at allpoetry for a long time, we're really enjoying your poetry. You seem to have a lot of talent, you know.
Keep on writing
Dee
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Thank you so much, that is so nice.
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Thank you very much for the comment.
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Yes, she needs all the help she can get. She's not good at writing poems Thank you for the comment.
~Jer -
I can see where your mom gets her creativity...do you help her?
Just kidding whisper!! Good job buddy!!!!!
Peace and love
Susan
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awww another really creative and beautiful poem...you are going to be such a great writer when you grow older..
not that you aren't now, but an even better one you will be...
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this is just as good as your moon one... these poems are just soo simple which makes them really cute...you have a way to say your only 6!!! hope you keep on writting when your older you will be really good at it!!! love your poems.
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Thanks a lot. Thank you for the comment.
~jer -
PERFECT
Not alot of people commented on this one "the sun " But i feel that it is equally as good as all of the others IF NOT BETTER.
Great job it's so pleasant to sit and read this and all of the others. -
Very beautiful!
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This is very beautiful. You did an excellent job on this. I am so proud of you
love you
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