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I Love My Family

I love my family.
My nice family.
I love my nice family.
My family is nice to me.
I love my puppy, mom.
My puppy loves me my mom loves me.

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My first poem.


Written March 20th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • ch0colate
    June 12, 2004
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    AWWW!!! This is SO beautiful! Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest! take care hun


  • Cemetery Rose
    June 4, 2004
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    YaaaaY! You have entered a poem in my contest. Thank you
    Good luck little guy!

  • Jer
    April 30, 2004
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    Thank you very much.

    ~Jer

  • Jer
    April 30, 2004
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    Thank you very much for the applause and comment.

    ~Jer


  • luckhole
    April 27, 2004
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    wow, for a first poem this is just amazing, you must make your family very proud!! and yourself too!!! and your dog as well!! why not??


  • Jcsketch82 gold member
    April 27, 2004
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    Very well done, I'm a Jer too. Good job

  • Jer
    April 21, 2004
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    Thank you for the comment. My mom is whispernthedark.


  • catz Moderators member
    April 18, 2004
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    Aww, this is such a nice poem.. it's refreshing to read these wonderful words telling us how you feel about your family...and your dog

    I want to thank you for reading and commenting on my poem, 'suitcases'. It was fun remembering those suitcases When you start to get kinda old like me, it brings pleasure lokking back at the good times of our lives.

    I'm off to read some more of your poetry. You write very well. Are your parents on allpoetry, too? If so, who are they on here?


    Dee


  • bambie k2004
    April 15, 2004
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    I am glad that you think your family is so special. And a little puppy too. WOW!!! I'm sure you are just as special to them as they are to you. Great Job little man.. Keep writing
    Bambie


  • Mini-Desire
    April 13, 2004
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    hey this is wonderfull jer I bet you do have a nice family (and dog)by the way your writing I bet your wonderfull mom and dad taught you i'm jelous wonderfull jer just wonderfull I hope you win the contest great job lots of 's and 's

    +-+mini-desire+-+

  • Essence13
    April 12, 2004
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    Aww. this is very cute. Short sweet and to the point. Great write, keep up the good work! - And good luck in winning the contest!

  • Jer
    April 6, 2004
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    Thank you very much

  • Jer
    April 6, 2004
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    Thank you for the comment.

  • Cemetery Rose
    April 5, 2004
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    awwwwwww too cute. I love your family too!!! Good job!


  • My Darkness
    April 4, 2004
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    awww this is so sweet, i've read this one a few times now.. i love your family too buddy!!!!

    Your Aunt..lol

    -Stac- cutie!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 3, 2004
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    This is a very beautiful poem. It is perfect. And guess what? ... I love your family too Excellent job on this.

    love you


  • buggirl
    April 3, 2004
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    this is very sweet. you're very lucky to have such a great family. (and dog)

    Jen

  • Jer
    April 3, 2004
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    I am glad my poem makes you feel happy. Thank you

    ~Jer

  • Jer
    April 3, 2004
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    Thank you.

    ~Jer


  • candy177
    April 2, 2004
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    Awwww I too, had seen this first at DA but it's just too cute.

  • FaceValue
    April 2, 2004
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    sweet words.

  • Jer
    April 2, 2004
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    Thank you very much.


  • FlawedDestiny
    April 2, 2004
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    Aww I already saw this at DA but I wanted to say how sweet this is. I love it, makes me feel happy.
    -MISTY-

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