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Flash of Midnight




Watch
as it flashes
as it crashes
as it breaks against her face

Follow
as it traces
and embraces
every silent grace

you would say the sea is blue...
or green...
or red beneath a sunrise...

...but these are midnight waves
that wrap around her face
and curl like waves of lace

Watch
as it flashes
as it crashes
as it breaks against her face


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  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    2 days ago
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    Superb

    This is a very coool (lol) write. All joking aside I rather like both the style and imagery of this one. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • krystal47240
    2 days ago
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    thats awesome.. as it flashes as it crashes against her face.


  • going nowhere
    November 12

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    no one write a romantic poem like you... i know that it get redundant for me to say that you write with that floating feeling, as if my spirit is lifted from me and i see what it is like to live the words.
    you are one of the few who notice how the sun looks on the ocean surface before it sinks into the depth of darkness, or how the curls are like a lace neckline that rushes up the shore.

    and when you read this out loud, and pause in the right places, it is just... well... *sigh*
    amazing


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    September 4

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    you would say the sea is blue...
    or green...
    or red beneath a sunrise...

    Ooh, those lines gave such a lovely imagery. I'm imagining how different people can see it and how the ocean changes with each passing day. Nice poem, I enjoyed reading it.


  • insearchofsweetness
    September 1

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    Whoa that is like wicked cool!!! I love it! I happened onto here on the right day I see.
    This is just amazing. One of my favorites of yours for sure. Great stuff! How exactly do you do that?


  • Crazy-Love
    September 1

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    Incredible rhyming! This was a thoroughly pleasing read! I really love the way you broke up the stanzas of rhyme with the one in the middle.
    Looooved it!

    Crazy-Love♥


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 1

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    wow

    watch falsh and crash...three words conveyed so much in conjunction with a line: as here:

    Watch
    as it flashes
    as it crashes
    as it breaks against her face

    beuatiful...visit me and comment me as well dear


  • StarlightCerulean
    September 1

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    It sounds like a song the way this is written. Just wow!

  • Bipride93
    September 1
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    deep

  • msjuicytech
    September 1

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    This is a wonderful story... I love your rhyme. Well done!!!

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