she sleeps under the blanket of safe darkness, obsidian nightmares coming to haunt her. she watches the star sapphires dance inside her mind as the black diamonds haunt her again. the onyx dreams haunted her, night after black opaline night. black tourmaline lines floated into her mind as the haze of love faded, and the rose tinted glasses were ripped off by the cold night.
Author notes
began at midnight exactly.
part 6 or 7... black gems.
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I liked this. It reminded me of the names they give you as a Ap poet. Thanks for sharing.
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OK, This is the most amazing piece I have read in a good long while. The canvas upon which you painted this jewel encrusted tale is so very vivid in my mind, it is almost to bright to behold. BRAVA!!!!!
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thank you, really, thank you. it means so much ^_^
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oooooohhhh...I love this piece!!!! The imagery just sparkles upon the night sky. LOVE IT!!!!!
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you didnt comment on the others... this makes me a sad shadow...
thanks though lol <3
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very good hon, excellent imagery "...night after black opaline night. black tourmaline lines floated into her mind..." i love how right through this, there is subtle RHYME! yes, yes there is so
. But that's my favourite, how you run 'opaline' into 'tourmaline' what a great rhyme. "...And the rose tinted glasses..." i like this too, makes me think of how i feel come late night.
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you didnt comment on the rest... this makes me a sad shadow... go read the others...
thanks hon. and yes my prose does have tiny subtle rhyming. i knew youd be the one to spot it lol
thanky <3
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