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Anxiety.

Paranoia,

invisible dark figures in dim rooms,

anxiety,

heart begins to race,

palms cold, and sweaty,

she's crazy,

late at night,

fears of being murdered,

of never taking another breath.

Fear of never seeing the morning again,

gun shots wake me up from nightmares,

knife images in my deepest thoughts.

insanity,

depression,

sleepless nights.

Never being able to confined in anyone,

social leaper.

Angry soul,

angry mind.

Unhappy life.

Escape?

What do you all think? Been a while since I wrote anything.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • PolarbearOpapatika
    September 2

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    I truly understand what your going through.

    Another great write


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    September 1

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    Welcome to Allpoetry!

    This is really well done. Your words are effective, they show us how desperately sad and anxious we can be in this situation. Very intense, and perfectly portrayed.

    Welcome to Allpoetry
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    Good job, keep writing.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    September 1

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    Welcome to All Poetry~

    Intense, downhill spiraling takes it to disturbing till the one word at the end.
    The form is good. However, I would remove as much punctuation as possible so that it does not look like a narrow stack of statements. Poetry needs to 'ascend'. Know what I mean?

    Observation:
    (Think there is a word missing?)
    Never being able to [be] confined in anyone

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    Thank you. Warmly, CookieZeal