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Sense of Love

My eyes did pick out any errors
My ears heard all false tones
but an undercurrent was always there
each time we spoke on phone

Your perfume was inviting
Your touch a gentle flow
Your taste always delighting
from your head down to your toe

But the thing that was most striking
was the soul I couldn't see
That did cherish, all encompassing
that little fault called me


-Eddy

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 26

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    A sentimental write...with the catch at the end that makes it very poignant to we readers...You are a kind person...it is hard to see you as a fault..You are a helpful friend...I can see how your truthfulness is a treasure, but some may not want to be told the truth..men and women...Great write!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    September 24

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    Lovely rhymes, lovely thoughts,
    but an untrue line, the last one


  • Junebug694
    September 5

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    i love this!
    i tried to pick out a favorite part, but i just couldn't. the whole thing is amazing and the rhyme scheme is perfect
    thanks for a great read


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 31

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    You could never be a "fault", Eddy...little or big. Yes, I like it, though.

  • Stormraven
    August 31

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    I like this

    It has a nice tone to it

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