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Heart of Gratitude, Heart of Grace

"Responsibilty", she said, "in thought and attitude,
Accountability in every action, deed, desire,
With great humility, an open heart of gratitude,
Finding tranquility and yet, your soul is set afire,
In strict obedience, taking no froward latitude,
You shall experience all blessings towards which you aspire;
Step forward, execute the will to take your rightful place.
Rewarding such pursuit, I gift to you this heart of grace."






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Author notes

A modified Ottiva Rima using fourteen syllables per line with an internal rhyme at the sixth syllable. The end rhyme scheme is abababcc the internal rhyme scheme is ddeeffgg. The use of echoes from the words froward, towards, forward and reward was intentional.

This poem depicts a beautiful, dignified, princess explaining how her hand may be won.

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  • rinzurajan
    November 1
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    i liked the idea and form...good luck


  • Amera gold member
    September 10

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    This is very good! I think the internal rhyme is necessary to smooth the flow of the extralongameter. I think this will do well in the contest but I don’t see how any host can judge 67 entries fairly. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Purrsanthema
    September 2

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    What a beautiful poem! I love especially the last line and I think you've set it up so beautifully, with the rigor of the preceding ones!


  • Goddess of illusion
    August 31

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    Oh wow, what a gift... It would be a fool who turns this down... Great write, short and sweet in my eyes though but enough...



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