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.Train-wreck.

there were a thousand words going through my head.
[&.i.couldn't.manage.to.say.a.single.one.]

"I'm a mess,
I've told you this time and time again."

you didn't understand the silence or the distance in my eyes, but you sang to me and whispered ''I love you's" in my ear.
[three.simple.words.I'll.never.return.]

you told me I was beautiful and when you looked into my eyes you seen innocence.
[emptiness.seems.more.appropriate.]

"I'm a train wreck,
don't lie to yourself,
we both know you deserve better than this"

my broken smile, my insincere words, my empty eyes, the razor blade scars on my arms.
everything about me screams out "disaster."
I can't help but wonder, why do you still try?
[every.attempt.is.hopeless.]

darling, my heart could never belong to you. It only knows how to belong to him.

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It's not exactly what I wanted it to be.
I can't seem to find the right words tonight but I decided to put it up anyways.

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  • FionaJay
    August 31

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    Wow. These seem like the right words to me! This is a really moving, heartbreaking poem. I love how the bluntness of its language and the structure of the sentences, particularly the use of directly quoted speach and brakcets really emphasises the raw emotion felt by the poet. In terms of a title, the phrase that stands out to me from the poem itself is 'train wreck', but is this what the poem is about? Is it this aspect of it that you want to focus on?