I want to write in hypertext
everyletter, everyword, everysentence
existing in MASSIVELY MEANING
A clue to the Logos
a cell of itSELF - a minature
microcosm of the entirety of its MEANING.
When i write LOVE
hover your cursor over the word
click on the link and know
LOVE
(inchildsmind grasping,needing
inthedog foolish and loyal
in the heart of the french lover
the pagan the mayan the entirety of its MEANING)
that would be mental - imagine a sense of EVERYTHING
that the word symbolised. all its myriad interconnections
flowering language links into a thousand premutations in an
everexpanding number of minds.
It would kick you in the brainballs faster than any DMT,
triptamyne, dream machine, ketamine, shamanic hooooohaaaaa
instant language injection = POP goes your head, spilling
its ritualistic, symbolic guts out, only space for the one word.
If i could do that - what word would I write?
BUMCHEESE.
(lol)
or perhaps, shimmering.
or a sentance: gossamer threads of a sleeplight blossom.
i think i just
want to hear the echo of eternity in everything
the resonance of humanity. the hum of godscreating
and MASSIVELY MEANING
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BUMCHEESE.
(lol)
you know, I really love that bit - BUMCHEESE.
(lol)
But what does it mean? Please let me know (but exclude all vulgarities).
Massively.
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WOW! from your comment on my poem, I assumed your work would be on the traditional side, but am delighted to see the originality of it surpasses anything I´ve read on here so far. I like the way you describe love. I´m into the somewhat stream of consciousness style this has, and I really like the theme here, which you express wonderfully at the end. Very exciting work..the only thing I didn´t care for was the use of caps, which made the poem seem kind of aggressive, but that´s just me..and maybe you wanted it that way...I will definitely come back and read more of your work.
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Thanks so much
thats really kind of you
you know, i completly agree with you about the caps... my problem is that I don't really know how to make those words stand out without it... I do better with this sorta thing when I have a program that lets me mess with the format a lot more
allpoetry can be a bit stiff for nonpayers like me
Any ideas would be helpful... trying to make the words stand out, without haveing to write any more words, and not using capitals...
i will have a think
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This is a fairly odd piece, but successful for that reason. It poses interesting questions about how meaning is created and accumulated over time, how we want to hear our own voices just to feel the words burst and know that they mean something, even if it is only to us. A bit of cheesy humor and a lot to think about, sounds like a good deal to me. Well done.
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Need to overlook the spelling in some places. I however am not a fan of this type of 'poetry' however I am all for being experimental. So I give you props for being original and trying to do something different, which will come with its fair share of praise and backlash. Having the will to do it and put yourself on display in the feature section for doing it is an achievement of will.
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Hey, where's the bad spelling?
I'm a bit aweful at it... language being fun to play with, and hard to keep from colouring outside the lines...
If anyone does notice spelling issues please let me know
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You had me for the first couple of stanzas. After "Know Love" where you open a parenthesis that isn't closed. (perhaps on purpose) IMHO, you could cut out everything after that line, until after (lol), and you could preserve the meaning and intention of the piece without beating me over the head with it.
I also didn't understand all of the instances of seemingly arbitrary compounding of words. 'sleeplight', 'godscreating', 'everexpanding' etc.
It's a great concept, and I see where you're going with it.
I especially like the lines:
"i...
want to hear the echo of eternity in everything"
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This is a great little poem. I speak 4 languages, and the science of speech never ceases to amaze me; how, i wonder, did people ever come up with all these sounds and meanings and letters and throw them all together to create the different languages we know of today?
Just one correction: 'sentance' should be 'sentence'.
Well done & keep writing!
Laura
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you sir are amazing.
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