To occupy one lazy afternoon
I thought what I could do for all mankind
I'm going to build my ladder to the Moon
There's isn't any doubt about the boon
Of walking into space when you've a mind
To occupy one lazy afternoon
I'll gather what I need and start it soon
Materials should not be hard to find
I'm going to build my ladder to the Moon
I'll rest the end upon a large pontoon
I wonder if it's well enough designed
To occupy one lazy afternoon
I'm off to find a mega-rich tycoon
With hoards of cash just waiting to be mined
I'm going to build a ladder to the Moon
A friend has drawn my dream as a cartoon
And given me a copy neatly signed
To occupy one lazy afternoon
I'm going to build a ladder to the Moon
A contest entry
- ladders (contest) by just mercedes.
1600 points, ended September 11, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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Thank you for your entry into this contest.
You've written a delightful villanelle, with the repetitions circling like dreams on a lazy afternoon. A ladder to the moon, built of words, is what you have created. Perfect structure - you know this ladder will be steady!
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Honestly, you say?
Well, Poet as honest as can be you are totally capable of villanelle ladders and mesmerizing spells. See you on the Moon soon!
Love
Myra
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Let me know when you have that lazy afternoon because I will come round and watch you as you try and achieve the impossible ... just because, knowing you, you'll manage it
A fun villanelle and a joy to read.
Sue
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What a fun villanelle!! And so well done!
Very enjoyable!
A~
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I Like this poem
Did yot win gold with this? It's a beauty of poetry. I like this. -
Won't work - it's not in a geosynchronous orbit. Check with Arthur C Clarke.
Cute villanelle, bro.
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It will be when I nail my ladder to it!!!
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A lovely Villanelle...
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Any subject, and form,any which way but loose and Jeff's your man
Great write my friend
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If someone was to ask me who I would say could build a ladder to the moon with a Villanelle, there is only one person I know that could do that. In fact there is only one person I know that would want to build a ladder to the moon. Thank goodness that person is also the same one who can build a perfect Villanelle and that person is you!
Love,
Amera
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